Hello WordPress! It’s indeed been a while..
Today while drinking my Tea I was thinking, I would quite like a blog that I can just put ideas, pictures maybe some reviews of things I’ve seen/played and or heard, then I quickly realised, hey… I’ve still got this blog, so that’s what you’re going to be now, an online presence for my brain. I’ll try to update it as often as I can, to try to keep it fresh and relevant.
Today I am going to talk about a piece I did during the week, what I liked what I didn’t like etc. etc. I’ve always liked that on here you could put work up and divulge more in to how you think it went. Most sites you can’t really be that critical, Tumblr, Facebook, Twitter and countless others, they all ask you to put up a picture usually followed by a couple of words and a tag, then boom! It’s out there. I’ve always liked when an artist is critical of their work, what they thought was good about it, what they didn’t like about it and would therefore change. So without further or due Here’s me trying to be critical (maybe overly so) of my own work.
During the week I created a very quick comic page, I was trying to remember how to work to a certain way again, as before leaving uni well, second semester to be precise; I created a comic that spawned the style of work that I would stick to regardless of computer technology. If you flicked through here I believe it’s somewhere, “our world of trees,” or something to that effect, any way I remember it being the first thing at uni for me that felt good, felt like mine, I was proud of it, the lead character was simple and so to was the story, but it wasn’t really about that, it was more about finally finding a working style that I liked doing. minimal pencil and free flowing brush pen was a scary concept. First put forth to me by my tutors. Basically it was drawing in ink.. for final Pages? That terrified me, no “edit undo” no “magical eraser.” If I made a BIG mistake, I would have to pretty much start again.
I spent most of that semester sticking only to the pen I was going to draw with. Trying to get more confident with it and the feel for how it worked.. the end result (followed by some computer editing) turned out ok, I made a book and unlike most of my uni stuff I’d come up with prior, I was actually quite happy with it.
Fast forward to 2014 and here I am, not really created anything comic book worthy in a while, so I thought I’d change that, cue this pic;
This is pretty much the method I employed for the work back then, only quite a few times quicker. Perks are I’ve gotten much quicker with my pen work, and quite a bit more confident in where to bold things out, while also judging where to add details. Downsides were, this was all from my head, no planning, no thought for story and no real layout plans, just a jot on the page. The latter of which I think shows, for one thing the pacing’s off, it all seems to happen a bit to fast, plus the idea for what’s happened doesn’t seem to be there. The man was passed out, hurt on a branch, he realises something’s wrong, something that makes him forget the pain, he looks in to an abyss, it’s gone what ever it was, things then quickly escalate with the sudden reveal of some type of bird. I feel I probably could have prolonged it to maybe another page. Show the pain he was in a bit more, try to establish in some way, what was so precious to him that made him that worried he forgot his pain… Of course this was where I was going pick up from in the follow up book ‘to our world of trees.’ But people that didn’t read that, wouldn’t have known this. perhaps a revisit to it with a quick recap of events before, or try a start off point that people can pick up from. there are ways of continuing the story and probably things I would consider if I wanted to take things further.
But then there’s this saying “Try to treat every start of a comic as though it’s someones first.” Can’t remember where I’ve heard that being said before, but I know it has been. In some ways it’s true and I have to agree with it but it maybe a tad illogical if you’re 20+ issues in. however it’s a method that could definitely be thought of in the creation process.
A quick panel by panel crit
Top panel: doesn’t really work, with so much bolded out black it’s hard to grasp an idea of what’s in the frame a case for maybe some tone, rather than bolded out black, try to convey the feel of isolation and pain a bit more, it’s the revealing panel after all.
2nd and 3rd panels: Pretty much the same thing, maybe a different angle or expression would have helped mix it up a bit.
4th panel: Probably the panel I’m happiest with, I’m happy with the expression of ‘realisation’ and I think the lined background method helps bring this across.
5th panel: Probably doesn’t need to be that long, especially with the Bird’s wing interrupting the picture from the bottom, the eye line naturally falls straight to that, before reading the 6th panel, perhaps If I squashed the panel and move the 6th panel up. I could have the bird reveal, take the whole bottom quarter.
Either way was mainly a study of my own work, I thank you if you’ve made it this far I think I went from reviewing to waffling on with out any structure, reviewing’s harder than I anticipated. I hope to get a tad better with reviewing things as time goes on.
Thanks for reading if you do and please feel free to say if you have anything constructive to say about this piece all things will be considered.